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Wednesday, April 20, 2011

The Darkest of Nightmares

Thin, intertwining chains,
blacker than obsidian
or the darkest of nightmares,
wrapped around a rigid
yet weary creature,
with enough room to move freely
but not room enough to be free.

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7 comments:

  1. MariahFriday, 22 April, 2011

    I absolutely adore the last two lines! I think this is a wonderful poem despite the fact the lines 4 and 5 seem a tad awkward

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  2. CarolineWednesday, 27 April, 2011

    I really really like this poem. And I LOVE the last two lines.

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  3. Elise2610Sunday, 01 May, 2011

    I think we all agree, it's a great poem! Well thought out with deep true symbolism! (Sorry to be repeatitive but it's true, the last two lines ARE amazing.) :)

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  4. AnonymousSunday, 01 May, 2011

    I love this piece it's twisted and mysterious. You made the idea really shine. And for the fourth time I absolutely love the last two lines.

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  5. sammywritesMonday, 02 May, 2011

    I felt like the whole story was told within a couple of stanzas!

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  6. AnonymousTuesday, 03 May, 2011

    Thanks everyone! I do think that lines 4 and 5 don't really fit well, but I couldn't figure out anything else to put there instead that would give the same image as I had in mind. Oh well! Glad some many people liked it!

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  7. Lian .DSaturday, 07 May, 2011

    WOAHHHHH you said so much withhh so little!!!!! this was amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! and it has such a creepy vibe! ^.^

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