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Sunday, January 30, 2011

Living Dead

She sits staring at the wall
Behind his head
As he shoots venom from his mouth
Invisible disks cover her ears
Trying to block the hate from entering
But the poison sinks into her skin anyways
"Why dont you take care
of anything around here?"
He asks, menacing as an empty gun to a child
Why dont you take care of me?
She thinks despretly
As her nails clench her palm
Moving up, clenching her wrist
Oh how she wishes
Her nails were knives
That could shatter her pale skin
And dig into her fragile veins
But she just sits and waits
For the poison to stop flowing
Into her empty body
Soon the venom will be too much
It will overtake her body
And leave it
Lifeless

you can also find more of my poems on my poetry blog which is tessapoetry.tumblr.com
thankss

1 comment:

  1. Some great stuff in here but also some confusion, the line "menacing as an empty gun to a child" for example. Why would an empty gun be menacing?
    I LOVE the contrast with these two lines:
    "Why dont you take care
    of anything around here?"
    He asks
    Why dont you take care of me?
    She thinks despretly

    I like the central image you are working with...his affect being poisonous...why not give him some sort of other poisonous imagery Snake, scorpion etc and build the images of toxicity building in her body throughout the piece.

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