I wasn't
Quite so mature.
Or quite so smart.
Or quite so thoughtful.
Sometimes I want
To be
Cared for, not care-taker.
Advised, not advisor.
The childish one.
But you see,
I've got
Expectations to meet.
And obligations to fulfill.
And my future to ensure.
To everyone else
I am success in the making.
Love this post, Mariah, but I don't know if this is just me liking long poems, anyway, I think that this should be extended and elaborated on some more, I like the track you're on right now, so keep going. I think that this is a topic that many people can relate to, and that in itself is a huge bonus. Keep up this new material!
ReplyDeleteI LOVE this poem! It's really relateable. I especially love the last stanza! It really helps to illustrate the image of how you don't want to grow up, and want to be a little kid again-without a care in the world-but everyone is pushing you to grow up and be someone you don't want to be. Again-LOVE IT!
ReplyDeleteThanks guys!! :)
ReplyDeleteGreat...very relatable to people of all ages...it is not just teens that feel the pressure to be "caretaker"...in fact as you get older and find yourself in charge of more than just your own happiness you spend even more time wishing for those carefree days. Well done!
ReplyDelete-me imitating my LA Honors teacher- *gasp* HORVATH! Didn't you know that "relatable" isn't a word! My goodness! "Relatable" is all you kids say and it doesn't even exist!
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Thank you though!!
please feel free to print this article and show your teacher that the beauty of English is its ability to combine/create etc...making it the language of innovators, creators, entrepeneurs and artists. Enjoy!!!http://www.nytimes.com/2010/08/15/magazine/15onlanguage.html
ReplyDeleteI love this poem! Not just because it was relatable but because you can tell there is feeling in the words. It is simple but the words say so much.
ReplyDeleteAhh Horvath has an answer for everything! He always wins.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the love, everybody :)