There were three men.
They were wealthy
and had all they ever wanted
and more.
Then there were the beggars.
Sitting in gutters
choking on life.
The first man said,
"I have so much,
but these people sit beneath me in filth.
I will give to theme all I own."
And so he did.
The poor rejoiced in the splendor
they received.
But its riches did not last long,
nor the first man.
He died in the filth
he had tried to clean.
The second man,
seeing the mistakes of he before him,
gave to the less fortunate
all he could
without drowning himself.
The beggars took it with pleasure,
but when its glory ran dry
they pounded his door for more.
"I have nothing left to give,"
he cried,
"nothing but my own beating heart!"
So they took that too.
Know that it was not greed
that stank in the pit of their chests,
but blind starvation.
The Third man looked upon
the gloom of there filth
and took a walk to the town square.
There in the slime of the city
he chose one ragged boy.
"You see this?"
he questioned
pulling one copper coin from his pocket.
The boy nodded in aw.
"Take it to the women over there.
Buy from her yeast for bread
and make with it your own loaf,
then sell it
for two coins,"
He died,
a wealthy man.
(I'd just like to say that the only reason this is not all in red is because Horvath sucks)
I like your little red comment there (:
ReplyDeleteI like it. I think its pretty good. But i do have one question.. Why not prose? It doesn't look bad this way, but its short story style is more common in the form of prose. So i was just wondering what made you differ from the usual style.
ReplyDeleteI love it. I'm so jelous i just wish i could write something like this. I think it's amazing the way you can take an idea or a message whatever inspired you and turn it into something so good and entertaining. I'm so impresed. I liked the way there was no fluff it was straight foward. Good Job!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI know I told you but I'll say it agian, I adore this one. I love how you elaberated (sp?) so much on the old saying, and made it into a story. I also love how you added the middle man, because I never thought of that when I heard this saying.
ReplyDeleteI for one disagree with your red comment...I think that it is not in red because blue is a much better color over black...I agree with Mariah, this seems like a parable that should be written in prose not verse...also, how are the beggars who kill the second man not greedy...they were full and wasted and now will take everything the man has to give without a thought for his person....that seems like greed not starvation talking.
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