Uncertainty fills my every move.
For everywhere scandalous eyes peer.
To pinpoint our insecurities
For either our appearence,
Who we’re friends with,
Or what we smile upon on a beutiful spring afternoon,
As songbirds flutter about in the air
filling our hearts with inspiration
From the screams and shouts from those besides,
As the sun glissens off your face,
And you realise the next goal is within your reach
To art,
Having your hand glide accross the page,
Without a care other than the shades and colors
That crowd the mind to witness
The next wonderous masterpeice
Then, deem you popular,
The next "it" in the lives of others
Hearing of "perfection"
Others seemingly try to strive
To be more you and less them
Or freak
An outcast, an individual
An oak tree living among willows
Although,
No matter how unlikely it seems at times
We are like china on a hight shelf
Fragile and prepared to crack
So next time before you judge,
Get to know them and deem for yourself,
Whether that person is a friend or foe.
Kind of preachy...you need to share with us a truth about prejudging before telling us what to do...is it so wrong that we judge others? Can it be changed? Don't we need to evaluate those around us to find our own place?
ReplyDeleteI really like the first line, I feel like i can really relate to this poem and every propesctive of it. We have all judged and been judged so many people can connect. I so feel though that the last line should be the stanza that really makes you remember this poem, and i think you should make it take a little more of a stance. But all and all i think this is really nice and well written.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Horvath, this piece can definitely be expanded upon; perhaps adding more to it about some of the unfair concepts of "judging a book by its cover?" Instead of instruction, perhaps make this into something that one can read and reflect on, rather than be told what to do.
ReplyDeleteI feel like this is so typical, I think you need to make this different in some way. I already know "everywhere we are judged. For either our looks, Who we’re friends with, Or what we enjoy doing," so you should expand the idea, don't tell me something you know, give me ideas that I can further develop. You just need to make this different.
ReplyDeleteI know, i wrote this really quickly meaning to get back to it but kept on forgetting, so I'll improve on it. Also thanks for the inspiration from your stories.
ReplyDeletePlease tell me what you think of the changes.
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