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Thursday, February 10, 2011

The Current

The Current

The current,
forceful,
rips everything
in its path,
off its foundation.

The current continues,
quick,
adding more debris,
to swiftly carry,
in its twisting route.

Turn aginst the current,
the harsh, merciless current.
Take sure, strong
steps, strides,
Against the Current.




Please tell me what you think!
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4 comments:

  1. Lian .DThursday, 10 February, 2011

    I like the blue font. It matches.
    Anyways I think this is a good poem! I like the alliteration in the 3rd stanza as well as the message, which I think is something along the lines of even though this current is strong you can be strong and fight it...or something like that. So good job. Lastly, in the last line "current" you spelled current with a capitol "C" is that a typo, or symbolic?

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  2. SarahThursday, 10 February, 2011

    Thank you! I put a lot of thought into my font color choices.
    I didn't realize I used alliteration...but I guess I did! I just thought it added more...power, or urgent-ness(if that's even a word) or something.
    The "C" in the last "Current" is supposed to be capitalized-it's symbolic.
    And thank you! I'm happy someone understands my poem!

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  3. SHorvathFriday, 11 February, 2011

    I would love to see you use line length to add to your meaning in this piece. I think stanza two would be cool with some longer lines that reflect the gathering of force and the grabbing up of materials that are near enough to be sucked in to the current.

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  4. maya pirulliSaturday, 26 February, 2011

    First of all I just want to say that I don't think this is a bad poem, in fact I do like it, but I feel as if it's the same old same old because everyone always describes life as a current. You talk about how it's still possible to stand against the current even though it's strong and how it pushes people in the direction it wants them to go. Personally I have herd this a million times and am pretty sure I've used it myself, it's not that your theme is bad its just that the way you get it across is overused. If you were to change the metaphor of life and compare it to something new it would be nice to get a different idea, even if you use the current idea but just make it different then the normal flow of thought. again though, i just want to say that though this may seem like a mean comment, I do like your work.

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